Anti-greed rap song for all the rappers out there. Check out my lyrics and tell me what you think?

Hey, I do Rapping myself. Your one problem is that you are trying to hard to Rhyme. Rapping is not rust rhyming it's almost like a pattern. Listen to Eminem and Lil Wayne for influence. You make a Point, then explain yourself backed up with a rhyme or two and then make another point linking on the rhyme that does not rhyme then continue and rhyme again, you can also bring back up the same topic after you hit the chorus. Otherwise your lyrics are sweet! Keep it up... .